Monday, January 18, 2010

chaos .osi

chaos ~

galactic turmoil
there is no bigger chaos
adolescent dreams

a bad school report
the dining table ' trials'
and bitter desserts ..

~ _ ~ _ ~

[ incandescence / HB - 6



monochromatic
whispers of a blind man's dreams
soft incandescence

a dog helps the man
a blind man , crossing the road
incandescent touch ..

/ original / zg

[ Ed: Line 5 - dining table ' proceedings / chaos
Line 6 - soft incandescence / HB - 6 ]
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9 comments:

  1. sgreerpittJanuary 18, 2010 at 9:12 AM

    your first verse is spot on -- adolescence, no greater moment of chaos in a persons life.

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  2. Tumblewords:January 18, 2010 at 12:01 PM

    Excellent. Sometimes, I think adolescents ARE chaos! :) I really enjoyed these haiku!

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  3. Stan SkiJanuary 18, 2010 at 2:27 PM

    Chaos and incadescent combined to great effect.

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  4. Andy SewinaJanuary 18, 2010 at 3:05 PM

    Nicely thought out!

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  5. Loch RobJanuary 19, 2010 at 5:58 AM

    Chaos comes in many forms. Depending on our point of view, none can seem small or insignificant.

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  6. The Write GirlJanuary 19, 2010 at 5:20 PM

    I love both images you've painted here...chaos is different in different people's lives. Lovely imagery

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  7. SandyCarlsonJanuary 19, 2010 at 6:19 PM

    Let's hear it for that incandescent touch and the love that gets us over all kinds of pain.

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  8. Artist Victoria O'NeillJanuary 22, 2010 at 10:12 PM

    love the dog and blind man haiku so much

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  9. AnonymousJanuary 23, 2010 at 4:16 PM

    i had to laugh and then smile... both wonderful reactions... thank you

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..namastey!~

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